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16 August 2008 @ 09:40 am
DA Fic: Lost in the Moment  
Not long ago, twasdark did some prodding and convinced me to enter the Dark Angel Summer Mini-Ficathon. Since it was short and not much pressure, I caved and said why not? So I took a stab at writing a short Dark Angel fic. Not quite sure how I feel about it, but hopefully it will be okay.

Title: Lost in the Moment
Author: Moonshayde
Pairing: Alec/Rachel
Spoilers: The Berrisford Agenda
Summary: She brought him to a place he never wanted to leave.
Word Count: 487
Rating: PG

Prompt: americangrl69 wanted "A day in the life of Alec/Rachel (Alec/Rachel, fluff)"

Disclaimer: None of them are mine. Just having fun.


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He was invincible. He was fearless. He was untouchable. So why did he feel powerless in her arms? There was something in the way that she smiled that made him weak, and it scared him.

494 remained speechless as Rachel held him tight. The rain hammered down on them, and despite his mental prodding to head back to the estate, he found himself grounded to the site.

She was even more beautiful in the rain. Her hair clung to her face and neck, while little rivets trickled down the top of her summer dress. 494 watched the water meander out of sight and wanted nothing more to press his lips to the trail of droplets it left across her collarbone. From the anticipation in her eyes, he knew she wanted the same.

Rachel abruptly pulled away and before he could reason as to why, he heard her laughing. Her laughter never failed to spark something inside him. It wasn't just the raw power of heavy want, but something warm, comfortable, and inviting. He loved it there, in that place she sent him, and didn't want to ever let go.

Through the rain and the soggy grass, Rachel spun, her laughter unending. She didn't seem to care how silly she looked or how ridiculous her dance appeared; she just was lost in the moment, happy, pure, and free.

With a grin, Rachel ran to him and tugged at his hands, urging him to join her in her frolic through the well-manicured lawn.

He didn't hesitate.

He laughed with her, their soaked bodies clinging to each other as the pellets rained down. 494 let the fear melt away as her slick hand washed away the water from his eyes, and he leaned closer, meeting her in a cold, wet kiss.

The scent of the fresh rain, the feel of her dewy skin, the taste of her strawberry lip gloss – they overwhelmed his senses. He couldn't think. He couldn't speak.

In that moment, there was only her, him, and sound of the rain.

He liked the way her eyes sparked with fire and life. He liked the way she looked at him, through him. He liked the way she made him feel like he could take on the entire world or how she could make him quiver from her gentle touch.

He wasn't sure how long they danced, how long they chased each other and tussled in the rain. He just knew he felt an energy that he'd never felt before, not even on his best and most productive days at Manticore. This was different. This was somehow better.

494 didn't want this to end. His target could stay locked up in business meetings indefinitely for all he cared. He just wanted to savor this moment forever.

He felt so alive.

Rachel made him feel human.

Today he wasn't just X5-494. Today he was Simon Lehane. Today, he was human.
 
 
Current Mood: curiouscurious
 
 
 
mrsevilpigeonmrsevilpigeon on August 16th, 2008 02:24 pm (UTC)
NICE!

For your first forray into DA land, you nailed it! That was wonderful!
Working for the Mandroid: ben/alecmoonshayde on August 16th, 2008 02:50 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I'm glad that I didn't blow it :)
gatorpezgatorpez on August 16th, 2008 02:42 pm (UTC)
That was very nice. Thank you.
Working for the Mandroid: badassmoonshayde on August 16th, 2008 02:50 pm (UTC)
Thanks for reading. :)
Spiletta42: Chekov Uhura smilespiletta42 on August 16th, 2008 03:51 pm (UTC)
Excellent! You've nailed the character. :)
Working for the Mandroid: say what?moonshayde on August 16th, 2008 04:00 pm (UTC)
Thanks. I'm so glad. I get nervous when writing something new.

Btw, I have been mulling over the tutor thing. I'm absolutely interested, but my old insurance days are coming back to haunt me. I keep seeing liability issues and I'm trying to think around that.
Spiletta42spiletta42 on August 16th, 2008 04:09 pm (UTC)
Liability issues . . . yeah, I haven't thought of any of those, so I'd appreciate your thoughts.
KariHermione: Alec Cakekari_hermione on August 16th, 2008 04:11 pm (UTC)
Wonderful inside in to what 494 was thinking.
Working for the Mandroid: alec smilemoonshayde on August 16th, 2008 05:42 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
twasadark: Alec gorgeoustwasadark on August 16th, 2008 05:24 pm (UTC)
Yay for my prodding!! :-)

Wow! What a great little piece! It is so beautifully written - you really captured Alec's wonderment at Rachel, which Jensen did such a great job of portraying. There are so many great lines in this. Here's an example of one of my favorites, though:

He laughed with her, their soaked bodies clinging to each other as the pellets rained down. 494 let the fear melt away as her slick hand washed away the water from his eyes, and he leaned closer, meeting her in a cold, wet kiss.

Love the last line, too. Great job, hon!
Working for the Mandroid: badassmoonshayde on August 16th, 2008 05:45 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I'm glad it worked. Writing fic for a new fandom is so hard. I really did want to capture a sense of wonder so I'm glad that came through.

And thanks for the nudge :)
aizjanika: da alec crying - by americangrl69aizjanika on August 16th, 2008 05:33 pm (UTC)
Dark Angel fic! This was awesome. Alec is my favorite role for Jensen so far, and I think you really got him here.

Yay!
Working for the Mandroid: say what?moonshayde on August 16th, 2008 05:49 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I'm glad that you liked it. I wasn't really expecting het to be my first foray into DA fic, but that is the prompt I received. I'm glad I did it justice. If I ever have time, I'd like to write a couple of gen ones, but I don't know if it will happen.

Alec is intriguing. I'm mostly interested in the Ben/Alec parallels and it's become a big inspiration for an original story I'm working on. I wish the show could have gone deeper into the whole Ben and Alec thing, as well as just going deeper into his character and how he was changing and adjusting to the world. I feel sort of short changed that the show got canceled and therefore his character felt incomplete.

So he's not my fave Jensen role. (I'm hung up on Dean.) But if he'd had the chance to take the character farther, I think I would have really been hooked :) He really is one of my fave characters on DA and I loved The Berrisford Agenda :)
aizjanikaaizjanika on August 16th, 2008 08:14 pm (UTC)
I think part of what I love about Alec is that he *is* incomplete. I really, really hated where they went with Dean in season 3 (like they took what everyone in fandom thought and made him that guy), but Alec is sort of an unfinished book, so a bit more intriguing to me. Also, I think Jensen did get better as an actor later, but I adored the way he played Alec.

Anyway, you really did a great job. I don't read a lot of het, but I thought that relationship really worked for Alec and made sense for him, so it was fun to read even just a little more about that. Your story fit right into canon in a nice way, though even if it hadn't, I probably still would have loved it. :-)
limpflig: sleepquirkies on August 16th, 2008 11:31 pm (UTC)
simon would have caught pneumonia
aww! great job here. it's a little scene with no dialogue or drama, but you really make me feel for the poor boy. i was reveling in his enjoyment of a new romance, and i was smiling with him. but those last few lines remind me that too much of this is new to him, it's not a first romance so much as the first time feeling cherished at all. that packs a punch.
nice work!
Working for the Mandroid: Deanmoonshayde on August 17th, 2008 01:17 am (UTC)
Re: simon would have caught pneumonia
Thank you! I wanted to give the impression of a mix of new love and also that touch of humanity that he wouldn't have found at Manticore. I'm glad that came through :)

Thanks for reading!
rafikivenrafikiven on August 17th, 2008 01:44 pm (UTC)
Good job! I'm pretty new to reading Dark Angel fic, but haven't come across too many Alec/Rachel fics and I want more!
Working for the Mandroid: brothers (winchester)moonshayde on August 17th, 2008 03:46 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I am new to DA fic myself. I appreciate it :)
noturbaby: buffy/deanhezio2 on October 28th, 2010 04:08 pm (UTC)
This was sweet and romantic. Nicely done.
Working for the Mandroid: badassmoonshayde on October 30th, 2010 02:13 am (UTC)
Thank you for reading!