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13 May 2006 @ 07:49 pm
Icon Fic #1: Observations (SG-1) for sgflutegirl  
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Title: Observations
Author: Moonshayde
Season: Two
Category: Humor
Spoilers: Nothing specific.
Pairing/Character: Team
Summary: An alien takes interest in human behavior.
Warnings: None
Rating: G

Author's Notes: Written for sgflutegirl

Disclaimer: Stargate, Stargate SG-1 and all of its characters, titles, names, and back-story are the property of MGM/UA, Double Secret Productions, Gekko Productions, SciFi Channel, and Showtime/Viacom. All other characters, the story idea and the story itself are the sole property of the author. This story cannot be printed anywhere without the sole permission of the author. Realize this is for entertainment purposes only; no financial gain or profit has been gained from this fiction. This story is not meant to be an infringement on the rights of the above-mentioned establishments

Ashrimin sat upon his dais, head raised and proud, as he studied the off-worlders. Three were human, one Jaffa. He had not encountered many humans in his lifetime and found himself fascinated by their movements.

Of the humans, two were male, he'd decided. They were strange and gauntly with hands that flapped and flailed wildly. He wondered if they were performing some dance or ritual for the female. If so, she did not appear impressed.

"We are certain of their intentions?" Ashrimin asked, whispering to his attendant.

She bowed low to him, casting her gaze downward, two of her eyes narrowed and submissive, while keeping the third focused on the off-worlders. "You have seen their thought patterns. And they have assured us they do not serve the dark ones."

Ashrimin nodded, dismissing her with a low grunt. Long ago, when he was just a pup, Ashrimin had seen the dark ones. He had seen their slaves and their Jaffa. He had vowed never to let any that appeared of their kin to ever come near his future pack.

Then the off-worlders had come.

Ashrimin kept his gaze on his waiting visitors. The Jaffa said nothing, remaining still and closed. But the two males continued their movements, sometimes fluid, sometimes harsh. They barked strong words, their actions mirroring each other. He thought perhaps they were not dancing for the female, but mating between themselves.

The female remained unimpressed.

"Bring them before me," Ashrimin ordered his sentinels.

The off-worlders were brought to the dais. He noticed their motions had become subdued. He puffed out his fur proudly. They understood authority.

Ashrimin sat a little straighter. "Speak," he said, speaking in their tongue, having learned it quickly from their thought patterns.

"We're peaceful explorers looking for friendship," the young male said. "I'm Daniel. This is Jack, Captain Carter, and Teal'c."

"Hello," the one called Jack said, his lips thinning on his fleshy face.

Ashrimin shifted uneasily, bothered by this species' nakedness and the Jaffa's as well. Upon seeing his discomfort, the young one and old one began making faces at each other.

Ashrimin's curiosity was piqued again, and he forgot of their unpleasant appearance. "Are you mating?" Ashrimin asked suddenly, leaning forward, fascinated.

Both blinked in unison. "What?" they asked.

Ashrimin heard the female make a soft, snorting sound. Even the Jaffa appeared amused. Ashrimin decided he liked these off-worlders.

"Um…no," the young one stuttered.

"I think we gave you the wrong impression," the old one said. He and the young one waved their hands between themselves. "We're…"

"Communicating," they said together.

Hmm, Ashrimin thought as he watched them. Then, it could only be one other thing.

"We have a saying among our people," he said. "Tallik observes; tallik performs."

Ashrimin noticed that the off-worlders appeared confused. Only did the young one seem to understand.

The old one tapped his clothing impatiently. "Daniel? Translation?"

The one called Daniel turned a different shade, his cheeks touched with pink. "We-we have a saying like that where we're from, too," he said to Ashrimin.

Ashrimin smiled, showing his toothy grin as a sign of satisfaction. He and the off-worlders might have more in common than he had once thought.

"What does it mean?" the female known as Captain asked.

Daniel chuckled. "Monkey see; monkey do."

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aizjanika: team on earth - by coloneljackaizjanika on May 14th, 2006 01:27 am (UTC)
Hee! This is adorable. I could so see Jack and Daniel in that moment, and even Sam and Teal'c. I love it! *g*
Working for the Mandroid: Jack and Daniel (Urgo)moonshayde on May 14th, 2006 01:36 am (UTC)
Thanks! :)
mediatingmentor on May 14th, 2006 09:40 am (UTC)
Very good! While the idea for the fic itself was good, the description of Ashrimin was excellent! It's important when writing aliens that one writes in the way an alien would think (that is, in an alien way) - this, I think, is too rarely not accomplished. You do it well. =)
mediatingmentor on May 14th, 2006 09:41 am (UTC)
too *often* not accomplished, I meant. Assume I can phrase my words properly.
Working for the Mandroid: Chakaholicmoonshayde on May 14th, 2006 01:54 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! I tried anyway. I know that I get annoyed when aliens are a little too humanlike. Though I don't tend to like it when they are too unreachable, either. :)
mediatingmentor on May 14th, 2006 07:09 pm (UTC)
Did you read New Jedi Order? The aliens in it are a perfect example of how they should be, I think. They are genuienely alien (mostly in their culture and such), but you can still relate to them.
Working for the Mandroid: Jedimoonshayde on May 14th, 2006 07:15 pm (UTC)
I've been hesitating with New Jedi Order. I've heard good and bad things about it. And as much as I love Star Wars books, I've gotten bad at a lot of the authors for bringing the characters way way out of character. At least that's my opinion.

But that being said, the aliens that are introduced in NJO always seemed fascinating to me.
cyren_2132cyren_2132 on May 15th, 2006 02:35 am (UTC)
I've really enjoyed the first 3 books of NJO, but in the fourth Han goes on this big ol' drunken bender and it's kind of stupid. I haven't made it past that one, but I've been assured that it gets better.

I thought this fic had some very cute moments. I also liked the thoughts of the aliens, but I don't really have a good visual. I'm imagining this big wolfy creature with three eyes...
Flute: JD - Monkeyssgflutegirl on May 15th, 2006 12:47 am (UTC)
*giggle* I love it!! Thanks!!

"Are you mating?" ..."What?" ..."Um…no," ...

I love this part!!! :-)
aurora_novarumaurora_novarum on May 15th, 2006 03:08 pm (UTC)
Aw, very cute!